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Re: Hsin-Wei Hsu's 2nd draft

by Jung Yuen Shin - Tuesday, 9 October 2007, 09:00 pm

Hi! Hsin-Wei Hsu

Thank you for interesting paper!

Your paper is clear and easy to understand. You give a lot of information. In my opinion, 5^th paragraph can put together with 3^rd because you mention about art toy’s detail in 3^rd and you explained the detail of art toys. In addition, I wonder 7^th paragraph is conclusion? If so, it is good.

Re: Hsin-Wei Hsu's 2nd draft

by Min Hyung Lee - Tuesday, 9 October 2007, 10:31 pm

It is so interesting.....toy can be art work....wow...cool,...

I think you should decide focal point in "Art Toys Evolution" for your topic. I think it little wide to audience.

and if you suggest some example to audience, it will help to understand .....